Lot's of Standing Around (Kobe, Japan)

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Lot's of Standing Around (Kobe, Japan)

Post by Hideyoshi Chidarake » August 30th, 2017, 12:15 am

Lot’s of Standing Around
Intro Piece by Hideyoshi Chidrake

Akashi Hyogo Prefect, Kobe Prison
The Japanese Penal System was cruel and harsh but fair. Serving one year for a drug charge was nothing to the seasoned criminal like Hideyoshi. Here his status as a Wakagashira or as an Oyabun meant nothing. His sworn descendants were fucking up though, almost costing him a war with the mighty Yamaguchi Gumi. His number two, Shirase Tanaka was waiting outside of the prison for his boss. Shirase and Hideyoshi had been through some shit together. As he waited for outbound processing, Hideyoshi reminisces of yesteryear.


Hideyoshi was the Wakagashira-Hosa (Underling) of the Kogoshi Kai, a rather large family on the rise in Kobe Japan. Standing around waiting for his boss the Shateigashira (Lieutenant) he looked to Shirase who was new to the family. Shirase looked to Hideyoshi. ”So when the boss get’s here what do I say?” Hideyoshi smiles at Shirase. ”You don’t say a god damned thing. You smile, you bow. That’s it.”

Soon the Mercedes turned up the avenue and parked in front of the offices of the Kogoshi Kai. The men on cue all bowed as the Shateigashira arrived and entered the building. Walking past Hideyoshi he taps his shoulder and then heads inside, Hideyoshi follows him in. Once inside of the office the two move over to a room and begins speaking to Hideyoshi. ”Murase-Kai is getting too big for their britches. I need you to send a message. They opened a new adult store here in Kobe. I need you to take care of this for me, beautiful and clean. Make sure they pay their due.”

Hideyoshi bows. ”It will be done.” Hideyoshi moves out to the main room where the family was hanging out. Looking to Shirase, he smiles. ”You, come with me.” He looks to Michu and Riyota. ”You two, come with me.” They bow and walk out with Hideyoshi and Shirase. Walking down the street, he looks at the three men. ”You have tools?” They each nod as they turn the corner and heads into the small porn shop. He looks to the fat greasy man behind the desk and smiles. ”You know where you are? You're in Kobe motherfucker. This is Kogoshi Kai land. And you motherfucking Murase-Kai are not paying your fucking dues.”

Hideyoshi connects to the fat man’s face with a furious back hand, knocking him down. Jumping over the counter, he connects to the big man’s stomach with repeated kicks over and over again. Blood starts to spit up and soon whistles of cops are heard. He looks to his three men who would no undoubtedly die for him. ”Go back to the office, NOW!”

Shirase looks to his superior. ”Chidrake-san, we will take the fall for this. You go back to the office.” Chidrake admired the young man, but yelled. ”You sonovabitch, don’t you ever second guess me again. Or I will have your finger for an apology.” Michu a short, stocky fellow, the friend of Shirase looks to the boss. ”Forgive my brother, We just think a man of your station should not be going to prison.” Chidrake looked to Michu and admired his tenacity. ”You will catch the hell from the Murase-Kai. They will need young soldiers in this war, me going to Prison is the best position for me.”

Riyota was. Next, he was always a thinker and mostly quiet. He and his two friends were only eighteen. He knew that Chidrake was sparing them the harsh realities of prison. But he still did not like the idea. ”Shimose (Sorry) for my brother's actions. But we plead with you, let one of us take the fall.” Chidrake hands Riyota his pistol. ”Are the Kogoshi-Kai, a democratic organization? You will take me orders as law. Now go!” Riyota and company bow and head out, and soon Chidrake was doing his second bid in the Japanese penal system. The prison was a rite of passage for most Yakuza, and those three boys would face that soon enough.

Back to Current Day

Hideyoshi was Oyabun of his own family now. And Shirase was his direct descendant. Michu and Riyota stood as his direct descendants and helped run the Chiderake-Kai. Out of all his men, it was these three that he trusted the most. Watching the gates open up, Hideyoshi smiles to see the three men waiting for him. They each bowed on cue. The car that the Kogoshi-Kai had sent was beautiful, a 2011 Mercedes S-Class 550. It was an older car but nice. It was the tradition of the families to send a car and an envelope when a member did time for the gumi.

He smiles as he walks to the Passenger door of the car. Riyota opened the door quickly, and Hideyoshi stepped inside of the car. Closing the door, they headed to the Kogoshi Kai offices where a party was being prepared to celebrate Hideyoshi’s return to society. Hideyoshi stared at the lights of the pachinko parlors and businesses around Kobe as the car navigated through the thoroughfare. He looks to Shirase. ”Shirase-Kun, you want to tell me what happened last week with the Murase-Kai?”

Shirase behind the wheel looks over to his boss. ”Chidrake-sama, they are starting a drug operation in our turf. We were losing face, so I took care of it.” Hideyoshi frowns as he hears the news from his lieutenant.

”Did you clear that with Mr. Chairman?” Hideyoshi asked looking more and more annoyed.
”No..” Shirase just answered in a dry tone of voice. Hideyoshi frowned.
”We began this life together fighting the Murase-Kai. But that was in the nineties. Now they are my sworn brothers and part of the Kagoshi-Kai. You have embarrassed yourself Shirase-Kun. And you have shamed my family. Once we get to this party, you will give me one of your pinkies as recompense, and you will give another finger portion to Murase-San in apology to him. Then I will get you drunk, and we will celebrate my return yes?”

Shirase let out a loud. ”HAI!” Chiderake smiles. ”Good, now let’s get to the office.”

- Critique
- 3x Enforcers (Shirase, Riyota, and Michu)
- 2011 Mercedes S-Class 550
- For this to be left open for Part Two

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Re: Lot's of Standing Around (Kobe, Japan)

Post by Kingslayer » August 30th, 2017, 1:16 am


Not bad, watch the tenses though. There was some switching between past and present that muddied it up a bit. Other than that, I'd like a bit more detail into your relationships with these men. Flesh it out brother. I know you can.

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- 3x Enforcers (Shirase, Riyota, and Michu) - They're just regular thugs with no guns until you write upgrading them
- 2011 Mercedes S-Class 550 - Sure
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Re: Lot's of Standing Around (Kobe, Japan)

Post by Hideyoshi Chidarake » September 7th, 2017, 8:26 pm

Setting Shit in Order!
Crime Story by Hideyoshi Chidarake

The car pulled up to the offices of the Kogoshi Kai. They were a much larger family than the Chidarake-Kai, and that was the main reason he had sworn to the Oyabun and became his sworn son. Walking up to the building the known Wakagashira or the number two man of the Kogoshi, Hideyoshi was given a grave amount of respect. It was a mighty long walk for him to make it to this position. He had the smallest affiliated family to the Kogoshi and yet he was effectively the family Underboss. People bowed as he walked down the narrow hallway and made it into the main room of the office. His sworn father, Oyabun Hamada Kogoshi stood at the head of the meeting hall and smiled. ”My son has returned to me.”

Hideyoshi bowed to his father sharply. ”HAI! I have returned.”

The Oyabun embraced his son and fell on his neck. ”Now I can live in peace now that you are here.” Hideyoshi smiles and looks to the other old guard members of the Kogoshi Kai. Many of them were friends, some enemies because of the position he held. He waited for them to offer their respect to him and all of them did except one. Kibe Eijiro, one of the Komen or accountants. A simple pencil pusher was defying the Wakagashira of the family, and even though Kibe was seventy years old, he was not above the rules of the Yakuza.

Hideyoshi turned to face the errant Komen. ”So you pay no respect? How much work in the wars over the past two decades have the Chidarake-Kai put in so you would have numbers to count? OH?” He moved over and grabbed the accountant by the neck. The accountant squeezed out a few words. ”One of your men raped my daughter, he was forgiven because he was your man, but my daughter has lost her honor.”

Hideyoshi looked very angrily to the old man; he then released the man’s neck. ”Who has done such a thing?” The Komen pointed to Koide Rai a simple thug in his gumi (family). Hideyoshi looked to his father who gave an approving nod and soon the Wakagashira moved over to the samurai sword on the wall and grabbed it, moving in several deft moves over to Koide and with one deft blow the bones of his neck were sliced with razor precision dropping the thug to the floor in a puddle of blood. Looking for the man who was over Koide, Riyota-san, "I want YOU to clean up this blood and body since it was your man who caused this great embarrassment to the Chidarake-Kai.”

Riyota bows. ”HAI!” And he get’s to work with another of his men to get rid of the body and clean the office floor. Hideyoshi turns and walks back to the Komen who bowed and then dropped to his knee bowing to the floor. ”My daughter has her honor.” Hideyoshi smiles. ”I expect your continued loyalty to our Oyabun, and your continued respect to the office I hold.” Kibe nods. ”Without question.”

Moving to take his seat next to his sworn father and Oyabun he tosses the sword to Shirase. ”You have something to do don’t you?” Shirase nods and turns to Murase. ”For my disgrace and dishonoring my Oyabun Hideyoshi Chidarake by fighting your operations. For this disgrace I offer penance.” He takes the sword and places the three fingers closest to his thumb on the palm of his hand and with one move takes out the pinky and ring finger on his left hand holding it up to Murase. ”With this, I apologize.”

Murase stands up and looks to Hideyoshi. ”Today you see a true Yakuza before your eyes. Hideyoshi Chidarake could have used his position to weasel out of having to apologize for two wrongs his gumi has committed while in prison. Instead, he punishes the offenders and makes perfect recompense to both parties. He is a true Yakuza. And I respect him greatly. Chiderake-Sama I wish to enter into a sacred sake ceremony with you like your younger brother.”

Hideyoshi really could not stand Murase; he was a drug dealer who did not deserve the spot as a soldier in the Kai. But he would not refuse the man. ”Murase-san. I accept your offer of brotherhood. It would do the Chidarake-Kai a great service to be allied with the Murase-kai.” He bowed to Murase and the two men embraced in a hug. Sitting back down in his seat he looks to his Oyabun who was now standing. The room fell silent.

”My two sons, this is how men are to act in the Yakuza. It is time to rebuild. The Yamaguchi Gumi has been getting too close, and I need all of my families war ready in case we have to defend Kobe from their incursion. Hideyoshi, the family, has sent your gift of the Mercedes over to you. I trust you like it. To help you get back on your feet, I also offer this other gift in tribute for you.”

As he spoke those words, a man came and stood before him with a briefcase. Setting the briefcase down he opens it before Hideyoshi. Inside was 10,828,250 Yen the Equivalent to One Hundred Thousand US Dollars. Hideyoshi looked at the money and looked to his father the Oyabun. ”You honor me, this money will be used to get the Chidarake Kai ready for battle. I humbly ask for one more thing. If you have any spare pistols or sub machine guns around I would ask if we may use them so that my men would be prepared.”

Kogoshi smiles and looks to one of the other komen (accountants). ”We have three AK’s and ten cheap Glocks not being used. Maybe you can use those?” Hideyoshi nods and smiles. ”That would be great.” Kogoshi smiles and then looks to everyone assembled. ”Let’s eat, Chidarake-kun still has to stop by and pay our aneh-san (wife of the Oyabun) his respects and then get to his office to get his gumi in order.”

Food was brought out and set before the executives of the Kogoshi Kai, and the feast began.

- Leave this open please for Part Three
- Review or what you liked or disliked.
- Death of one of my thugs for disobeying the rules of the Yakuza.
- $100,000 (10,828,250 Yen)
- 3 AK 47’s
- 10 Glock 17’s

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Re: Lot's of Standing Around (Kobe, Japan)

Post by Abysswalker » September 7th, 2017, 9:01 pm

- Leave this open please for Part Three [Granted]
- Review or what you liked or disliked. [Below]
- Death of one of my thugs for disobeying the rules of the Yakuza. [Granted]
- $100,000 (10,828,250 Yen) [Granted]
- 3 AK 47’s [Granted]
- 10 Glock 17’s [Granted]

It's nice to see other forms of criminals being portrayed on the site, I used to love reading things in the World Forum back in the day and I still enjoy it now. Honestly, I don't know much about the Yakuza, it's organization, hierarchy, or much in the way they act and such. However, I'd like to just point out a couple things with the way the story was written:

First, you come down exceptionally hard on your underlings. Obviously, the cause is just, and I don't blame you for killing Koide Rai for bringing such dishonor to your family. However, the way you dealt with Shirase, your trusted number two if I understand correctly, seems unjustly cruel. For one thing, you've now taken four fingers of his for slights he's made against you and your family (two in the earlier post and two in this one) which as I understand it is a punishment employed by the Yakuza, but not necessarily this severely. For instance, I believe that the tips of fingers are severed usually for the first offenses, and not to mention that losing four fingers is incredibly detrimental to his quality of life.

I'd like to see how you draw them so entirely into your control, things like how you take care of them or how they've come to so completely fear you.

Second, I'd just like to see more of the story fleshed-out. I know it can be difficult to describe life in Japan, it's an entirely different culture and practically a different planet. However, there are little things that you can do to really bring to life the world you're creating and I'd love to see you try some creative steps towards this.

Anyways, that's just my two cents, and overall I think this has the potential to be a very interesting storyline, so I'll be looking forward to where you go from here.

Enjoy! (And please, if I've made any error in the way I've interpreted the story feel free to PM me!)

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